ARKAAN - Chapter 1

Evelyn · **Posted:** February 1st, 2008, 2:05 pm

Yes. It's finally here.

Ok, to be honest, this is like, 2 months late. I've been working on this since June, and until the middle of November, I've done nothing but let plot ideas mature in my mind. I started to actually draw on November the 15th. And for my planned release in December, it was WAY too late. Apparently, school, life, and Counter-Strike cut into the time I was actually able to draw this, and by the time it was December, I had two pages done. I originally intended to have 15 pages in chapter one, but it got too **** late I had to cut it in half. Now, chapter one is seven pages long, and now serves as a prologue to the story. It was not originally going to be a prologue. Despite the cut and the lateness, it is still EXTREMELY rushed, and it's definately not the best art I can do. I'm sure by the time I start drawing, say, chapter 7, my drawing skills would have improved, and maybe, I can draw faster by then. But for now, enjoy chapter 1, and don't expect chapter two for at least two months. Sorry for all the delays. I promise you that chapter two will be much, much, MUCH better.

Oh, and one more thing.
The characters, names, places, and other things in this "graphic-novel/manga/comic/whatever-you-call-it" are entirely fictional. Any similarities to any person, place, or thing in real life is COMPLETELY COINCIDENTAL.

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Adbot · **Posted:** February 1st, 2008, 2:05 pm

Cowboyofdeath · **Posted:** February 1st, 2008, 2:28 pm

Wow, you have really done a great job!!

The only criticism I have is that you need to work on drawing your people. Some proportions are off and most of the people look about 16 years old.

Also, your angles. In page 6, there was a panel depicting a person running down the hall. If you want to convey a sense of urgency, you would use a different angle than just straight-on.

Ryan · **Posted:** February 1st, 2008, 3:40 pm

I think it is amazing. The only thing that didn't seem too real for me was when the guy got hit in the face with the butt of the gun. It doesn't look like theres much force going into the hit, so I doubt it would knock them out

Kirby · **Posted:** February 1st, 2008, 4:32 pm

I like it. Yeah it was way delayed. They are great pictures. I just don't understand how it is a story. They are pretty detailed, but there isn't much of a story line. Try adding more of a story line in it since you act like it is a book. Great work though.

Just to let you know that the 'Art' and 'Information' on the top of the site won't change to them.

Evelyn · **Posted:** February 1st, 2008, 6:52 pm

Yeah, I know the links don't work. Also, (look below)

Cliff Dude wrote:

[...]and now serves as a prologue to the story. It was not originally going to be a prologue.[...]

Harkaan · **Posted:** February 2nd, 2008, 2:56 pm

nice name

:I really like your story line, and the drawings are great, keep it up

Adbot · **Posted:** February 2nd, 2008, 2:56 pm

Evelyn · **Posted:** February 2nd, 2008, 3:02 pm

Harkaan wrote:

nice name

:I really like your story line, and the drawings are great, keep it up

Rofl, your name minus the "H" was NOT what I intended

Harkaan · **Posted:** February 2nd, 2008, 3:27 pm

lol I know, but I just saw the thread and was like "O_O"

its a great story though, keep it up

Kenny · **Posted:** February 5th, 2008, 9:27 am

If that was in the shops I would definatly buy it, keep up the great work and make more please

Mushroom Queen · **Posted:** February 6th, 2008, 7:32 pm

Ohh, I love how you split the scenery, very creative. However, I really really do not like seeing pencil strokes on finished art (unless it's a sketch). Have you thought about buying a set of charcoals or inking pens? Or even CG-ing the whole picture? It'd look a lot better if you did, since what you have right now is a bit too rough around the edges. Good work though!