Sigil of the Damned

Brandt · **Posted:** May 19th, 2007, 4:42 pm

So, i wrote this for my fractal: http://www.deviantart.com/deviation/55685972/

A body lay hidden
The river of blood parted
And laying on ground
A sigil of the damned

A cursed tragedy
A foreshadowing doom
And shimmering with gloom
A sigil of the damned

The reaper had come
The deed had been done
And amongst the books
A sigil of the damned

A shot of a gun
The strike of a knife
A destiny ended leaving
A sigil of the damned

The cries of a woman
A betrayed spirit
The treason hath formed
A sigil of the damned

Adbot · **Posted:** May 19th, 2007, 4:42 pm

EnglishPenguin · **Posted:** May 19th, 2007, 4:57 pm

From what I understood of it, it seems quite good.

Probably would've been better if I understood what sigil meant, LOL.

Brandt · **Posted:** May 19th, 2007, 5:11 pm

A sigil is, from Merriam-Webster:

Quote:

a sign, word, or device held to have occult power in astrology or magic

Jaden · **Posted:** May 19th, 2007, 9:55 pm

Once again, very nice fractal and very nice poem.

Anubis · **Posted:** May 20th, 2007, 4:39 am

It's very visual. The imagery is good. However, the rhyming doesn't work. Instead of just putting "A sigil of the damned" at the end of the verse, try, in the second lines, to end up with something which rhymes, and keep your rhyming pattern consistent throughout the poem.

Verse 1
A
B
A
C
...
Verse 2
B
A
C
A
... and so on.

Poetry doesn't need to rhyme, but it does sound better if they do. :$