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PostPosted: August 25th, 2005, 4:23 pm 
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Ok, this is my RS story so far, I will need some decent bios in my other topic here.

Here it is so far!

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Prologue:

The citizens of Varrock were bustling about in Varrock Square, trying to buy and sell items. It was another normal day, and everyone was hurrying to get their jobs done.
That was when it happened. A shadow fell over the town. Women started screaming. Parents were rushing their kids into the house.
Because the sun was eclipsed with the symbol of Zamorak...

There was a giant crack straight through Varrock Square the next day.
The monsters of hell were coming out, ready to kill.
Most of them at first were ghosts, zombies, and skeletons. The warriors of Varrock thought " This will be a piece of cake!" Boy were they wrong. Then the dragons, hell hounds, and demons started to attack.
The warriors were dying like flies. People were being scorched by dragon fire. The Duke of Lumbridge was out of anti shields.

Two young twins ran out into the chaos in their full bronze and iron 2H's to find their father. There were rumors he was killed, so they went to save him if he was alive. Then a hell hound blocked their path. It swallowed up one of the twins, and when one was being eaten, the other went straight to Lumbridge to get him. There were monsters there, too, but not many at all. Soon it would be swarmed at this rate. He went to the courtyard and... it was deserted!
People were dying by the thousands.
No one was coming back.

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Chapter 1: Rise of Zamorak

Saradomin and Guthix were trapped in an unholy cage. They were in the very core of hell, with Zamorak.
"You will never win over the force of good!" cried Sara.
"Silence, brother! If I want you to talk I will command of it!" said Zammy.
"This is upsetting the balance between good and evil..." simply stated Guthix.
Sara tried to teleport out of the box, but nothing happened.
Guthix did too, with the same outcome.
"What did you do to us, Zammy!?" cried Sara.
"DO NOT call me ZAMMY!!" shouted Zammy.
Zammy snapped his fingers and one of the walls became transparent.
"Muahahahahaha, look at what i have done to those who have died! Instead of them going to that dreadful place of Lumbridge, they come and be slaves for me in hell!!" replied Zamorak.
"I have a plan" Guthix whispered.
"What is it then?" replied Sara.
"We use both our powers on one of the walls while Zamorak is monologuing again."
"That only works on the movies, you idiot!"
"What is a 'movie'?"
"Never mind, we have no other plan anyways."
"1... 2... 3!"
Guthix goes into a trance, and Saradomin pushes his arms torwards the wall. Soon it collapses.
They both sprint out of sight without him noticing.
They also try to tele again, with no avail.
"How are we supposed to get out of here?" said Sara.
"I guess we will have to find runes and do it the mortal way" said Guthix.
"I think I know where they hide them, but they use mine carts on a narrow beam across hot lava, and Zammy drained our flying power!" said Sara.
"Just tell me where to go, I can definitely walk the beam, I am the god of balance, remember?"
"Right. You go do that."
Guthix does a flip off the mine cart cliff, and vanishes into the darkness...

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Chapter 2: The Conspiracy

There weren't many people left. Only the most hardcore warriors were still living, and had no where to retreat to. Then it hit them.
"The H.A.M. Headquarters! They haven't found that yet!" one shouted. They all ran to the trapdoor. The master thief easily picked the lock and everyone rushed down. They locked the door behind them, in case there was an attack on the place.
What they saw was horrible. There were Ham members dying of starvation and dehydration from not being able to get to the surface.
The warriors were handing out what they had, and soon there was no water or food left.
The HAM members were using dummies to help get their combat up. They weren't getting anywhere very fast, as there weren't many dummies and they give low exp.
One of the surviving warriors was Jewel. She was an expert ranger, she could hit nearly any target. However, she was destined to be a ranger, because on tutorial island they gave her an air rune and a mind rune, and she rubbed them together like they told her to, but nothing happened! They let her wear a glory amulet for the second try (for its magic bonuses)
and nothing happened again! It was almost like she was magic-resistant. That's when it hit the mage. She was a true ranger, the exact opposite of a mage. The mage rushed her to the ranging instructor. There were many people trying to hit targets, but most failed out of 20 arrows to even go near the target, as it was their first times with a bow. It was Jewel's first time too, and her first shot did a perfect bulls-eye. She could wield green dragon hide without trouble as if she was ranging level 40! With some long and hard training she became one of the best rangers the world has ever seen.

The survivors were devising a plan to destroy the creatures. The crack had not been producing monsters for 2 days now. They needed a ranger to flank them while they were busy with the main force. Jewel volunteered to be the one. They were preparing for attack...

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Chapter 3: Rising lava and Claws of Guthix

Guthix landed perfectly on the beam. He could easily do flips, spins, and cartwheels on the beam with perfect balance. He began to run on the beam.
A mine cart zoomed behind him! Guthix, with perfect timing, did a back flip right as it was about to hit him. He landed on his feet, unharmed.
The goblins in the cart, however, sounded an alarm. The cart zoomed to the station and then the lava began to rise! Guthix ran with superhuman speed (he would have been there in less than 0.001 of a second but his powers were drained).
He could feel the burning heat become hotter and hotter as the lava neared him. He was almost there and the lava was less than an inch away!
He did a desperate dive and landed on the station floor, a bit shaken up but ok.
The zombie guards readied to strike. Even though Guthix didn't have much power left, he was much stronger than any human with the power he still had.
One of the zombies tried to swipe at him. Guthix easily grabbed the zombies hand and hurled him into the lava. The other two he just plowed through. Guthix turned off the alarm and said it was a false alarm. He set the cart to head to the rune area, and he got in. Soon he would be there...

Zamorak was furious. When the alarm was sounded he spun around and saw that Saradomin and Guthix were not in the cage. He made it a full alert and sent every monster he had left to go find them.

Guthix finally reached the rune area. He grabbed a bunch of laws, deaths, bloods, and tons of elemental runes. He also found a segment of his and Saradomin's power! "He must be hiding it all over this room" thought Guthix. He absorbed his power and grabbed the bottle of Saradomin's for when he found Sara. Now he was more like himself. Plus he had all of these blood runes and death runes so he could use Claws of Guthix. Then, hundreds of red dragons attacked! "CLAWS OF GUTHIX!" he screamed. Many runes disappeared, and many dragons died. He continued to do that until all the dragons were dead. He only had a few bloods left. Then he continued to look for more of his power...

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Chapter 4: The Ambush

"Xanthor?" said Zamorak.
"...yes master?" said an unknown voice.
"It is time."
"...yes master."

The survivors were ready to strike! It had been about 3 days since the crack had made monsters. Zamorak must have thought Gielenor was ridden of all life by now. The monsters had sort of a base in Varrock, so that was where they were planning to strike. Jewel grabbed a bunch of Rune and Addy arrows and poisoned the rune with most of her poison (she didn't use all, who knows when she will need more). She was supposed to go to the ruins of the castle and snipe from behind the monsters while they were busy with the warriors. The warriors attacked! All of the monsters ran to fight them. It looked like the teams were pretty even, the monsters looked about as strong as the warriors right now.
Jewel carefully but quickly sneaked past the fighting monsters and climbed up the castle ruins. She found a nice high spot and prepared to shoot.

That was when it happened. A ghost looking thing, no wait, it was ashade shimmered into view behind the monsters. It looked as if it was giving orders to the monsters! "Oh, come on, I have enough crap to deal with today." Jewel said. She quickly loaded a poisoned rune arrow into her bow, aimed at the shades head, and fired!

Right as the arrow was about to hit, the shade shimmered out of view.
"Oh well, as long as he is gone." said Jewel. Then it shimmered right back again, and threw a poisoned dragon dagger at her, and shimmered away again!
Jewels countless battles gave her excellent reflexes, and barely dodged the dagger in time! It stuck in the wall behind her, and the shade shimmered right behind her and pulled the dagger from the wall! Then he pulled out a dragon long sword in his other hand, and was wielding them both at the same time.
"Uhnh..." Jewel groaned. That kick took a lot out of her.
"Jewel..." it said in a raspy whisper.
"Wha...What do you want with m-me?!" she stammered.
"...he told me about you"
"Who is he... Zamorak?"
"yesssss... zamorak... now i must KILL YOU!"
The shade dropped the dagger and brought the long sword down hard on Jewel. Jewel lifted her bow in front of her... the sword smashed through the wood... and time seemed to stop.
Jewel's life flashed before her eyes. The playful, fun times before the land of Gielenor in her old world as a child, the first, fateful day on Tutorial Island, her long and hard training, her letters from her parents, her times of great happiness and times of sorrow...
The sword cut through the bowstring.
The sword was a centimeter from her nose.
"goodbye world..."

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Chapter 5: War of the Gods

Guthix had found all of his and Saradomin's power. He quickly teleported to Saradomin and gave him his power back.
"Ahhh... that's better..." said Saradomin.
"Quick, we have to stop Zammy!" shouted Guthix.
They quickly made it to Zamorak's chamber.
"You escaped and came back to me!" shouted Zamorak. "Fools, now I will destr... uh... why aren't you in your mortal forms??"
"This has to stop, Zammy."
"CLAWS OF GUTHIX!"
"SARADOMIN STRIKE!"
There was a flash of light in the room, and time... seemed... to... stop.

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Epilogue

The citizens of Varrock were bustling about in Varrock Square, trying to buy and sell items. It was another normal day, and everyone was hurrying to get their jobs done.
Jewel was walking down the main street, looking at the amazing buildings, especially the castle.
She looked at the bright sun, but for a moment, she thought she saw something blocking the sun... kind of like a w... but then it stopped.
"Jeez, my imagination these days." she said.
And the rest of the day was perfectly normal, and the day after that, and the day after that...

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I like the prologue and chapter 1 but where is zamorak then?
and whats the deal with chapter 2
thats not rebellion, thats aiding

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lol gamefreak really started something here,didn't he?i'm writing a story too. :P

i really like how your story has a sense of humor,and i only noticed one problem and that was spelling lol.(guthix not guthics :roll: )

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oops... lol, i used teh spelling checker thingy and i meant to hit ignore when it scanned guthix, but i hit change to, and the first choice on there was Gothics :oops:

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nice story so far. the only mistake i seen is that guthix is a floating metal skull


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Yes! I finally finished the story. OK now you can vote on it!

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