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| Author: | Brimmk [ December 15th, 2010, 11:49 am ] |
| Post subject: | Runescape Jingle Bells |
Hello people, As it is the holiday season, I have created my own little version of jingle bells, but it's slayer themed Tower Christmas(to the tune of "Jingle Bells") Dashing through a swamp A godsword at my side to go and try to kill the creatures that there reside I've got a super-set and a backpack full of shark what fun it is to fight sing this slaying song in the dark! Oh! Up a floor, through a door there's a banshee scream I hope these earmuffs do job and I don't become a meme comments, praise, constructive criticism and other parodies welcome! |
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| Author: | Adbot [ December 15th, 2010, 11:49 am ] |
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| Author: | trekkie [ December 15th, 2010, 6:34 pm ] |
| Post subject: | Re: Runescape Jingle Bells |
i think it needs a little more work. it's not flowing well for me. just needs a few more adverbs and adjectives. |
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| Author: | Brimmk [ December 15th, 2010, 7:33 pm ] |
| Post subject: | Re: Runescape Jingle Bells |
sorry, i had forgotten a line, i think it should be better now |
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| Author: | trekkie [ December 19th, 2010, 2:14 pm ] |
| Post subject: | Re: Runescape Jingle Bells |
it's better but, i say try singing it outloud to see if it matches in your head. it isn't flow as well, great start though |
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| Author: | 99887 [ December 19th, 2010, 9:37 pm ] |
| Post subject: | Re: Runescape Jingle Bells |
Yeah I agree with trekkie, The syllables per line dont match up so well, for example "the creatures that there reside" line has 1 syllable too many in my oppinion And the line before it "to go and try to kill" has too many 1 syllable words which makes it feel jagged. It could be amazing. It's pretty good now though. |
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| Author: | Asher [ December 28th, 2010, 11:27 am ] |
| Post subject: | Re: Runescape Jingle Bells |
nice. Some of thelines are good and some of them kinda dont rhyme that well. That's really cool though. |
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| Author: | Adbot [ December 28th, 2010, 11:27 am ] |
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| Author: | Killjoy [ December 29th, 2010, 9:58 am ] |
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Lmaoo I like it. Very clever. Good job! |
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| Author: | Brimmk [ January 5th, 2011, 6:09 pm ] |
| Post subject: | Re: Runescape Jingle Bells |
Thanks guys! It was just a little inspiration one day, and I decided to write it down and post for laughs |
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