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| Author: | Jeff [ July 23rd, 2009, 9:26 pm ] |
| Post subject: | An Advertisement I made |
Ever seen the iPhone "There's an app for that" commercial? Here's my version for a website. Let me know how I can improve. |
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| Author: | Adbot [ July 23rd, 2009, 9:26 pm ] |
| Post subject: | Register and login to get these in-post ads to disappear |
| Author: | Burnt Joint [ July 23rd, 2009, 10:27 pm ] |
| Post subject: | Re: An Advertisement I made |
The only thing that I would change is when you say "...there's also a learning path for that." Advertisements don't need to be Grammatically correct; the target audience need to be able to relate, so I'd change it to something more colloquial like "...yep; there's a learning path for that, too." Or something along those lines 
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| Author: | Al3X [ July 23rd, 2009, 10:59 pm ] |
| Post subject: | Re: An Advertisement I made |
The music was a bit too loud compared to your voice. Otherwise I don't have any problems with it. |
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| Author: | Italy4life [ July 24th, 2009, 3:07 pm ] |
| Post subject: | Re: An Advertisement I made |
ur voice was a little bit hard to hear with the comparison to the music. |
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| Author: | Duke Juker [ July 26th, 2009, 1:31 pm ] |
| Post subject: | Re: An Advertisement I made |
Nice. I like the parody. It is a well done commercial  .
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