its a good story, but the end kinda just rambles on, try to make it more proffesional sounding. I liked the flow of the story tho, how each event mixed into the next
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| Author: | death omen [ April 24th, 2005, 12:04 pm ] |
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Once in the peaceful land of runescape there where 3 gods, Zamorak - God of evil, saradormin - god of good, and Guthix - the god of balance among the worlds. there had always been a comflict between saradormin and zamorak but it had never turned into a full blown war.....not yet anyway. there had been peace in the land of runescape from as long as anyone could remember because the gods had never actually fought in the open so nobody knew about them, but one dredful day zamorak had finally chosen to strike go to war with saradormin. when saradormin got word that zamorak was coming with his strongest forces, he gathered his own forces and prepared his warriors for battle. zamoraks followers included chaos druids, monks of zamorak, necromancers, and demons. saradormins followers included monks, preists, mages, and most of the common people of the runescape world. zamoraks swift hand had swept the land very quickly and had brought the fight straight to saradormin. in a matter of days after zamorak had declared war on saradormin, he was at his doorstep. the fight between the 2 gods followers raged on for months until zamorak called off his followers. now you should know that zamorak is not the type of eveil god that will just give up, he had a good reason for calling off his troups....and saradormin was about to find out soon. less then 2 hours after the withdraw of zamoraks forces, a major and very suprizing thing happened....zamorak himself had come to fight saradormin. in a one on one battle that raged on for almost 5 years, there seemed no hope of ending the battle because the two gods where so evenly matched in power and skill. finally after the 5th year zamorak had become very upset and decided to cheat in the battle. being a very skilled mage in the dark arts he used his powerd to blind saradormin so that he couldnt see. then with a swift strike zamorak pulled out his dragon long sword and shoved its though saradormins heart, the battle was over. zamorak had one the battle and killed saradormin. as u recall earlier i metioned 3 gods, but in the story i only told yuo about 2 of them. the other god, the almighty god guthix - the god or balance, had the power to change the past so the the worlds stayed in balance. he also had to power to make things in the past not happen with ment that he could make it so that the war would never happen. as the god of balance he had to turn back time so that saradormin was not dead AND make it so that the war never happened so that the world would still have a balance of good and evil. after guthix changed the past, there was once again peace in the land of runescape, and nobody remembered the war....... please give me ur personal thoughts about the story. ~death~ |
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| Author: | Adbot [ April 24th, 2005, 12:04 pm ] |
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| Author: | czskrazzi [ April 24th, 2005, 2:14 pm ] |
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im too lazy to read it right now but wouldnt this go into runescape general discussion? |
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| Author: | King Kulla [ April 24th, 2005, 5:33 pm ] |
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its a good story, but the end kinda just rambles on, try to make it more proffesional sounding. I liked the flow of the story tho, how each event mixed into the next
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| Author: | bateater [ April 24th, 2005, 5:42 pm ] |
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I would of liked it but you had one instead of won and u instead of you other than that its ok and a few gramatical errors but yea its ok |
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| Author: | wolves_prey6 [ April 24th, 2005, 5:53 pm ] |
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thats a lot of writing i only read part of it |
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| Author: | Jeff [ April 24th, 2005, 6:04 pm ] |
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Please spilit it into paragraphs.. It's too hard to read like that. |
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| Author: | magicfann [ April 24th, 2005, 6:16 pm ] |
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its cliche i dont like it 3/10 |
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